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HASSAN YUSUF

The Rosemont-Eagan-Apple Valley school district will be getting a new superintendent by the name of Jane Berenz. On it's May 11 meeting school board officials in a unanimous vote approved Jane K. Berenz as the new superintendent. Superintendent Currie who's served for 6 years will be stepping down and Mrs. Berenz will take over on July of 2009 officially. Berenz was on the finalists with the other being Stillwater Superintendent Keith Ryskoski.

After 6 years Superintendent Currie will be stepping down and the district will be handed to good hands. With 20 years of experience and full support from board officials Mrs. Berenz will be a new voice for an ever progressing school district.

THE REVIEW: This is quite well done. It has the who, the what, the where, the when, the why, and the how. The only thing I have to say negative wise is typographical. The second sentence needs to get rid of the apostrophe in "it's" and there needs to be a comma after "meeting". Other than that, it is a very good hard news beginning, there is no sign of opinion whatsoever. One thing I still want to know is what has she done in the district so far?

CORY PATEL

When we were freshmen we usually thought of school dances as fun or exciting it was a memory we could all have. But now a days as we get older the only dance that seem to qualify in as cool are Sadie's, homecoming, and of course prom. So what make the difference in a dance that's rock'n to the beat and on that just isn't in rhythm. I investigate to see what really is the core of a school dance and really makes them fun.

Ill interview a school official that is at the head of organizing the school dances from where it at to what music to play. Next ill interview a student that is a part of making the dance become a real event, and finally ill interview a student to see what really makes a school dance fun.

THE REVIEW: To start, a sort of 'opinion' can be seen in the paragraphs. You never want to refer to yourself in an article. And quite frankly, you should never, ever, say what you are going to be doing in a paper. I hate to say it, but this is not very good at all. I want to know why school dances aren't fun anymore. I don't want to know who you're going to interview. You need to cut out any opinion and any reference to yourself.